There is a title called Twittering into the Day, but no reference that I could tell to Twitter itself. Is there a reason why you used that title? It sounds good but it just struck me that most people will look/listen for the Twitter reference.
You know what I loved? The group in the hallway singing that song. I thought: that should be the opening sequence to the video. Just a thought.
Some of the titles are in white font and hard to see at times. I always struggle with this and never come up with a good way, but it is distracting at times.
I loved the break-out session work. Great insights.
I loved seeing old friend, Joe B.
The final reflections and ideas — wonderful stuff.
You know there was the comment about the stereotype of the writer (isolated) and it felt to me that this was important and could have been moved up or highlighted somehow. it gets a bit lost at the end.
And the end of the video comes suddenly — it almost needs a final clip to wrap things up, in my mind.
I hope you don’t think I am being critical here, just being constructive. Feel free to ignore my ideas. I loved the work.

Kevin

Don’t be afraid to use your voice to frame the story. You are the creator of this piece and I always love getting “the sense of Bonnie” in the DS, especially in introducing the day.

Judy

The DS on TESOL is muy cool. I really like it. Have some feedback if you’re still in drafting mode:

There were some things you did around the middle that I really liked in terms of helping the audience get a sense of the workshop itself. I loved the part where you caught a shot of one of the presenters (Lynn, Judy, etc.) and put in their name and workshop title. It really helped us see that afternoon breakout sessions. (Did you get and name Joe and Alish too?) But seeing that made me, retrospectively, want a little more structure for the front end. I wasn’t sure that people would really get the recording activity and it’s point. So I wondered about
Putting in some text, perhaps via questions. Like, what if “What happens when you introduce something as simple as a digital recorder?” moved across the screen. Then we see the scene of the recording and we hear the participant reflecting on her answer to that question. Or something like that. I thought it might make the capture of that part of the workshop clearer.
I also wondered if in the very beginning we could get a sense of some of the questions for ‘twittering into the day’ either through onscreen text or a shot of the bingo sheet. It would connect, then, to the lovely capture of the person reflecting at the end about all the questions she couldn’t answer at the beginning of the day but can now.
And I realize that it is the prerogative of the filmmaker to put herself in or not, but I’d love to see you in there too…or some signoff by you or something.

Elyse